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Some people think that money is the best gift to give youngsters.Others feel that there are better gifts that they can receive .Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

It is a widely held belief that
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 is perfect as a present for juvenile, but there is a strong counter-argument amongst sections of the people that believe there are many valuable options available to
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 children in place of
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 as toys, video games, clothes, etcetera.
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, I am of the opinion that
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 is a matter to be debated under the light of several factors before a reasonable conclusion can be drawn. The
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 and foremost reason is that
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 as a
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 may impact their life adversely as there is higher chance to invest
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 on useless things, narcotics,
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 they may imbibe any unethical habit for the lifetime. The
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 worth-mentioning reason is that children always trilled about little gifts they never judge
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 as it's expensive or inexpensive, they just appreciate what we give them. So it's better to
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 things they love
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 as comics, video games, sports equipment, and any sophisticated gadget.
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, recently, I gave a Barbie doll present to my niece on her 7th birthday and she was very jubilant after seeing her present and gave me a big hug in return.
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, with
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 as a present,they may forget after some time but if we
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 them item according to their hobbies they always remember us while using that item which develops a great bond and mutual understanding between two.
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money
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 as a
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 helps them to buy the things they adore. To be more specific, it's hard to predict the choice of kids, so it's better to
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 them
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 to buy things of their own choice rather than the things they may throw in the dustbin.
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this
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,
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 as a present teach them
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 management as offspring always plan how much they have to invest on the thing they want to buy and how much will be left in their hand, to save in their piggybank, which helps them to learn
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 flow or value of
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 and how to save for future, which is sophisticated beneficial for adulthood.
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, recently I read a news in an Indian newspaper that a child of 14 years had saved 65000 rupees in his piggybank which he got from relatives as gifts, to buy a motorcycle to his father as he wanted to see his father going office on a bike. To conclude, after analysing both the views I am of the opinion that
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money
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 as a
gift
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 has a few benefits, there is a high chance that children may use it in the wrong way.
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, In formative years, children do not aware of the value of
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, so they admire the things they love and play with
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 as games and toys, which are perfect presents for a kid.

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Word Count

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