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Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of their fame an invasion into their private life? Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

#people #media #privacy #price #fame #invasion #life
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In today’s time, the media treated unfairly to the celebrated individuals. Some people believe that they need some freedom so they can enjoy your
life
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. Other consider that if their personal
life
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 would become social that they will get more famous. In
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 essay, I will discuss both views and provide my opinion
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. On the one hand, well-known people are like to share their private
life
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 on social media.
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 is because they believe that they can achieve more fame and people will like them and they will be famous.
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, a survey was conducted in 2018, which stated that about 39% of celebrities share their personal
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 to get fame.
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, I believe that popular people should live their own
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. They should be a limitation on their work-
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 and personal
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. People will like them because of their work and success.
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, celebrities are role models for the youngsters and they follow their lifestyle. It will have a bad effect on them.
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, an article was published in Dawn newspaper that showed that 85% of the young generation are influenced by famed celebrities. To conclude, as I discussed above, famous people show their skills by their work not by their personal
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. So, they can enjoy their
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 in a better way.
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