The number of students studying science at university is constantly declining. What do you think are the causes? What effects will this have on our society?

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It is undeniable that
university
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education
is fundamental to
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the
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students
.
However
,
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the
last
few years, there
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a significant decrease in the count of
students
who study in
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medical field. In
this
essay, I will discuss the reasons behind the massive shift including
high paying
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education
and difficulties
to secure
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in securing
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a job,
along with
its negative implications for society. The pivotal factors that are responsible for a decline
such
as expensive
education
and job insecurity. It is seen that in order to pursue the M.B.B.S degree one
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to pay higher fees which is a herculean task for the vast majority of
students
.
Also
, sometimes degree holders have to face immense difficulties in order to secure good job positions because employment demands reference and previous experience.
As a result
,
students
get disappointed and alleviate their admission
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a
science
stream.
For example
, a student with
fresh
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doctorate degree
denied
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by the
hospitals
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due to
the
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lack of experience.
Thus
,
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are the causes for a change. The trend could bring some potential cons to the community.
Firstly
, the incessant drop of
students
in the medical stream could lead towards
the
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far worse outcomes because there will be a decrease in the number of scientists, doctors, nurses,
science
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and science
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educators,
then
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several positions will be vacant in the hospitals and people have to wait for a longer time for the treatment. The situation could put people's lives at risk.
Secondly
, the government of our country needs to hire
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science
experts from
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different nations, which will affect the economic structure of our country, as
the
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doctors and teachers from other countries will charge high
salary
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salaries
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.
For instance
, the investigators of NASA are in high demand and quite expensive for another country.
Overall
, our society will face
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problems
due to
the inclination of the
science
group in the universities.
To conclude
, people's preferences have
been
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changed these days as only a few
students
opt to study
science
for higher
education
. The essay has discussed why it is happening and its effects
for
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the individual as a whole are myriad, which needs to be addressed to keep the number of
science
students
constant.
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The introduction is not clearly focused on the task question, and the conclusion does not effectively summarize the main points of the essay. The logical structure is weak, and the essay lacks coherence and cohesion.
task response
The essay partially responds to the task question. It discusses the causes and effects of the decline in the number of science students at university, but the discussion lacks depth and thoroughness. More specific examples and comprehensive ideas are needed to fully address the task.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • perceive
  • challenging
  • demanding
  • humanities
  • exposure
  • discourage
  • financial incentives
  • shortage
  • skilled professionals
  • technological progress
  • innovation
  • economic growth
  • global challenges
  • scientific literacy
  • informed decisions
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