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Some people believe that young people brig more profits to a company. Others says that older people actually bring more profit. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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It is an irrefutable fact, that because of the new
technology
 on mass media, devices and digitalization are making a gap between generations. Specially with the sudden born of the internet. In the following up paragraphs profits for both young and old people will be discussed and
finally
 my personal opinion will be stipulated.
First
, now a days young people spend a lot of time with devices that give them an enormous advantage to get in touch with
technology
 that will
use
 in their future jobs.
For example
: The
use
 of ubber. Young people can
use
 internet from they movils and get to know interfaces that help them to stay in touch in their daily lifes with digitalization. But
this
 does not mean that
this
 will mean profits in the job. By the other hand, old people are not as familiarized as young people with all the devices.
However
, they can have experience on their jobs.
This
 can mean profits for the companies.
For example
: If there are an important business in the company that will bring utilities for the industry in which they work, the
use
 of modern
technology
 can be not needed. To close a good business there is not a necessity for devices. To recapitulate, for companies the most important issue is to have the best ganancies. In my personal opinion, the
use
 of internet and all devices are strong tools for making profits. Maybe young people can work with
technology
 but old people can have the best opinion on how to handle a negotiation and winn money for the company.
Therefore
, the main goal talking about utilieties is that young and old people work together together as a team.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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