The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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There is no doubt that with the advent of social media the face to face interaction among people in the society has become almost negligible and

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advantages. Social Media has made it possible for people from different part's of the world connect with each other.

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they enable us to contact our family friends and relatives who live away from us. But

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are many problems associated with it.

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, the lack of communication. People nowadays prefer to talk more on social media rather than having a face-to-face interaction.

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can have serious effects on an individual's personal and physical life.

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, a new study had found that the individual's who spent

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ajority of there time o social media had very weak and poor communication with there family members.

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individuals had a very less physical activity which drastically affected there physical health.

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, the invention of these platforms has

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made it possible for cyber theft, hacking, spreading of fake news and many other problems.

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, there are many pages and fraud accounts on social Media that cheat people online. These accounts would contact the user and make them believe that they have won a certain expensive price. Now in order to claim that price, they ask the user to give them his or her personal details. Using these personal details, the fraud accounts can have access to home details, credit card details and

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other sensitive information.

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the personal information of the user can be sold on to the black market, which has become increasingly common in

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recent times. These are just a few of the many disadvantages of social media. So in a nutshell,

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the invention of social media has enabled us to connect to the different parts of the world, the disadvantages associated with it outnumber

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

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Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

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Topic Vocabulary:

face-to-face interaction
geographical barriers
global community
cultural diversity
economic opportunities
superficial interactions
mental health impact
loneliness
depression
interpersonal relationships
real world
spread of misinformation
echo chambers
societal polarization
informed citizenship
constant connectivity
maintain relationships
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