You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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There are two contrast arguments about the effect of

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dvertisement, the

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is its significant influence on customers to force their buy items which are not really needed. The other

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is the products advertised could aid users to improve their quality of life. In my opinion, I am convinced with the

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argument and seemingly disagree with the

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because of some reasons will be explained

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Firstly

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, writing in the statement of the advantage of advertising,

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could tell us about the latest products may boost up our lives. It is not utterly true , in fact, producers tend to overpromote there products in order to sell as much as possible as nothing is actually good at the

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version, especially for

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intervening to our daily activities

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as the printing machines. The

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was used

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ong time ago but

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the

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time, it is not

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helpful

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for people until its later version released, faster, more sufficient and effective.

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, it is about

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marketing.

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, the

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finally

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ambition of producer is to bring as much profit as they can.

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, they tend to work out the way to persuade us to buy items even if unnecessary.

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, there was a trend to buy washing machines

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year after an attractive advertisement displayed on

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television. After

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ew days, people lined up in their store to buy a washing machine. I had asked some people why they have to purchase

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even though they already have

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, they answered it was because of the advertisement.

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, it is clearly the bad effect of

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kind of marketing. In conclusion, I agree with the idea that advertising may encourage people to buy unneeded things.

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, being deceived or not to buy, it is

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up to us.

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, why do not consider deliberately before purchasing items?

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

318 words

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