You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

There are two contrast arguments about the effect of
a
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an

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dvertisement, the
first
one
is its significant influence on customers to force their buy items which are not really needed. The other
one
is the products advertised could aid users to improve their quality of life. In my opinion, I am convinced with the
first
argument and seemingly disagree with the
last
one
because of some reasons will be explained
next
.
Firstly
, writing in the statement of the advantage of advertising,
this
could tell us about the latest products may boost up our lives. It is not utterly true , in fact, producers tend to overpromote there products in order to sell as much as possible as nothing is actually good at the
first
version, especially for
those stuff
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that stuff

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intervening to our daily activities
such
as the printing machines. The
first
one
was used
l
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a

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ong time ago but
at
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the
first
time, it is not
to
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too

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helpful
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for people until its later version released, faster, more sufficient and effective.
Secondly
, it is about
the
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apply

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marketing.
In other words
, the
finally
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final

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ambition of producer is to bring as much profit as they can.
Thus
, they tend to work out the way to persuade us to buy items even if unnecessary.
For example
, there was a trend to buy washing machines
last
year after an attractive advertisement displayed on
the
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television. After
f
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a

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ew days, people lined up in their store to buy a washing machine. I had asked some people why they have to purchase
n
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a

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ew
one
even though they already have
one
, they answered it was because of the advertisement.
Thus
, it is clearly the bad effect of
this
kind of marketing. In conclusion, I agree with the idea that advertising may encourage people to buy unneeded things.
However
, being deceived or not to buy, it is
also
up to us.
Thus
, why do not consider deliberately before purchasing items?

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