Nowadays, more and more people engage in dangerous activities, such as sky diving and motorcycling. Are you in favor of them? Use examples to support your opinion.

Adventurous activities like scuba diving, sky diving, motor racing, car racing, bungee jumping are in trend currently. While some people think above-mentioned activities gives a feeling of satisfaction, others do not see them as usual. According to me, no doubt there is a
risk
involved in
such
pursuit but
that is
the main fun of it. Adventure,
that is
the main reason behind some people's feeling of achievement. Some find adventure in playing common sports and getting good at it, while others go bit extreme in pursuing dangerous sports like racing or diving. Echoing
this
, the driving factor for
such
is
risk
involved, as the
risk
is huge, the feeling of achieving something grows.
Moreover
, few of them take as passion and make it a profession,
that is
widely accepted all over the globe.
For instance
, car racers not only get fame in the world
also
the respect of being expert in something which is not common.
In addition
, the aforementioned sports
also
involves positive benefits to one's life. Concurrently, If a simple person gathers the courage to act on something unusual which he never thought and involves a huge chance of losing life, that will work as a boost in the confidence.
Besides
, few who made these sports as a profession, earn a truckload of money due to
risk
involved.
However
, a lot of time
such
pursuit goes wrong resulting in death or loss of body part. But, hidden fruits always test sweeter,
such
that restricting these would result in encouragement illegally because of more
risk
. In conclusion, People who are involved in
such
activities are already aware of the danger and still pursue. So, restricting these would lead to chaos,
instead
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,
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possible safety should be provided in case something goes wrong.
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