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Some people think that the best way to solve environmental problems is to increase the price of fuel for cars and other vehicles. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some people argued that the solution to the environmental problem by increasing the
petrol
 price. In my opinion,
this
 may solve only partial things. I believe that the
government
 should create awareness of the environmental issue and encourage renewable
energy
 sources.
To begin
 with, Nowadays, people often using their own vehicles
such
 as bike ,car and so on.
This
 may result in high traffic in cities. Vehicles release
energy
such
 as carbon dioxide to the environment which affects the ozone layer causing global warming.
Hence
, A section of the society insists that the
government
 should increase the hike in
petrol
 which makes people not to use their own vehicles.
This
 will be helpful partially,
however
,
this
 will affect some of the middle-class families who require to go to their office on time.
On the other hand
, The
government
 impose a law that people should use public transportation during the weekends.
As a result
, we can see some reduction in traffic which may not pollute the air at least eight days a month.
Besides
, the
government
 should encourage to use renewable
energy
such
 as wind, solar and tide
instead
 of using non-renewable
energy
 resources
such
 as coal and
petrol
.
Furthermore
, they have to create awareness about environmental pollution by broadcasting on
the
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television.
This
 would be helpful that people can change their mind and they try to choose public transport. In conclusion, The solution is to create awareness about environmental pollution and change the renewable sources from non-renewable resources by the
government
 rather than on increasing the
petrol
 price.
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