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Some people think that the best way to solve environmental problems is to increase the price of fuel for cars and other vehicles. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some people argued that the solution to the environmental problem by increasing the
petrol
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 price. In my opinion,
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 may solve only partial things. I believe that the
government
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 should create awareness of the environmental issue and encourage renewable
energy
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 sources.
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 with, Nowadays, people often using their own vehicles
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 as bike ,car and so on.
This
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 may result in high traffic in cities. Vehicles release
energy
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such
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 as carbon dioxide to the environment which affects the ozone layer causing global warming.
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, A section of the society insists that the
government
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 should increase the hike in
petrol
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 which makes people not to use their own vehicles.
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 will be helpful partially,
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,
this
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 will affect some of the middle-class families who require to go to their office on time.
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, The
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 impose a law that people should use public transportation during the weekends.
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, we can see some reduction in traffic which may not pollute the air at least eight days a month.
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, the
government
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 should encourage to use renewable
energy
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such
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 as wind, solar and tide
instead
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 of using non-renewable
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 resources
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 as coal and
petrol
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.
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, they have to create awareness about environmental pollution by broadcasting on
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television.
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 would be helpful that people can change their mind and they try to choose public transport. In conclusion, The solution is to create awareness about environmental pollution and change the renewable sources from non-renewable resources by the
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 rather than on increasing the
petrol
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 price.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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