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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case ? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed ?

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How does feel it to be a boss? Can you control to an employee? Or how many things do you know regarding business management? If you want to be a businessman, you should ask yourself these kinds of questions. 
However
, you can choose to work for a corporation which will probably related to your skills. Can you work comfortably according to the schedule which has shown your workplan? You can easily understand that being an employee or an owner is depend on your character. Ways of earning money have been searching for people for years. Most people want to be rich.
Moreover
, their passion has changed their life.
For example
, ancient times peoples had invented trade.  In the beginning, they just changed things to take other things and after centuries, afterwards, trade has improved.
This
 situation emerged from employees and owners. Working for another person, you think if it doesn’t matter, you can be an employee because you will not question about your status and you have worked according to your profession.
For instance
, no need to think all evidence except your scope in your workplace. To create a business for yourself, being successful has been the most important things in your life. You have thought for all the time except the area of the workplace.
Additionally
, it will be continuous, earn money, manage a job, listen to a problem, take a risk and fix all of these. It may sound hard but many people must have wanted it due to the money and their passions. 
On the other hand
, they should know that time is not recovered because people have lost nearly all of their time when they work.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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