Nowadays, people in some countries can choose to live and work anywhere they want because of the improvement of the transportation and communication technologies. Discuss the benefits and the drawbacks of the phenomenon.

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Due to
the development of the airline industry and social media, people can meet and communicate with their families from overseas easily.
Hence
, An increasing number of the population decided to settle down in a developed nation
instead
of staying in their motherland which happens frequently among developing
countries
’ citizens. It is no doubt that
this
trend brings both merits and disadvantages. On the one side, there are several advantages that can be dressed in
this
phenomenon. First of all, the migrants injected labourers into the market and
bring
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more energy to the economy of the
countries
. As a recent report shows,
for instance
, more than half of the taxi drivers and Uber drivers are Indian employees in Australia, and they helped dramatically with the booming workforce in the Australian transportation industry. Local Australians might face a shortage of taxi drivers if they do not have those Indian
immigrants
.
Additionally
, for individuals, most
of
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the
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immigrants
can receive a better income and higher life quality in developed
countries
. Especially, some people from the Third World,
they
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might experience wars, poverty and famine in their motherland before immigration. The completed community welfare in rich nations can help them build up a new life and receive a higher payment. On the other side, even though the
immigrants
can bring benefits to the nations and themselves,
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the disadvantages cannot be ignored. Primarily, the safety issues because of terrorizing attacks perplexed European
countries
and America in recent decades
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. The investigations have shown that most of the terrorizers are
immigrants
from Muslims. It caused thousands of innocent deaths in the
last
few years.
Furthermore
, developing
countries
are lacking labour resources since people starting to move to other rich
countries
.
This
leads to
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gas
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of wealth between developing
countries
and developed
countries
, which is obviously a threat to the peace of the world because the hatred of the rich would grow. In conclusion, the trend of
immigrations
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globally is non-stoppable in the
contemporaryorary
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contemporary
era, and it contains both pros and cons
to
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the world and individuals.
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