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Some people think that newspapers are the best way to get news. However, others believe that they can get news better through another media. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Newspapers
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 have been considered the most reliable
news
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source
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 for more than a century.
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, some
people
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 argue that various newer
source
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 of
news
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 is better than
papers
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 lines. In my opinion, it depends upon the age factors of
people
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 because our taste changes
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passing
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the passing
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time
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of time
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. The following paragraphs will explore both the point views with relevant examples.
To begin
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Newspapers
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 are still popular among individuals even though they live in the Globalized world. First of all, old age
people
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are
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still like to read the newspaper
as
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in
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 earlier years and they do not want to change their reading
habit
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habits
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.
Moreover
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,
Newspaper
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the Newspaper
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 is a trustworthy
source
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 of transforming data because it is written and checked by
journalist
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journalists
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 and Newspaper
Company
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Companies
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.
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, 80% of
Canadian
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Canadians
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 trusts
in
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apply
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newspapers
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 because they think another
source
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 of
news
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 spreads fake information regarding incident
occurred
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that occurred
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.
On the other hand
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, social media is
more
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preferable among youngsters and highly educated
people
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due to
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 its
time saving
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time-saving
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 and easy carry properties.
Firstly
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, there are various social media applications
such
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 as
Youtube
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YouTube
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, Facebook,
news
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 websites and many more where individuals can access any
news
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 portal from anywhere and anytime. For illustration, if someone wants to hear
news
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 about the latest football match during college break time but he or she do not have
newspapers
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 handy, in
this
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 case,they can watch
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news
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the news
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 via their cell phones. In conclusion, both
Medias
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Media
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 have their own importance
according to
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people
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’s
preference
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preferences
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. in my opinion,
people
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 should
active
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be active
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 on both sides because sometimes they get the
news
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task response
The introduction lacks clarity and conciseness. The body paragraphs have relevant examples but lack depth and specificity. The conclusion should summarize the discussion and provide a clear opinion.
coherence cohesion
There is a need to improve the overall coherence and cohesion of the essay. The logical structure can be enhanced by using more clear and coherent linking devices.
lexical resource
The lexical resource should be improved by using a wider range of vocabulary and more precise and accurate word choices. Avoid repetition and aim for more varied and sophisticated language.
grammatical range
The essay contains a range of grammatical structures, but there are instances of errors in sentence structure and word usage. Work on using more complex grammatical structures and ensure accurate use of punctuation and tense usage.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • news coverage
  • perspectives
  • opinions
  • accessed
  • interactive
  • engaging
  • real-time
  • multimedia
  • combination
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