Some people think that in order to produce a happy society, it is necessary to ensure that there is only a small difference between the earnings of the richest and the poorest. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
The economical inequality is so evident in our world. There are some people
think
that it is better to cap the salary of the rich, by doing Correct pronoun usage
who think
this
, the residents would be happier. I do not agree with Linking Words
this
standpoint since Linking Words
this
can have severe repercussions Linking Words
to
the nation.
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for
To begin
with, to improve the standard of the economically deprived, the first and foremost step is to avail free access to education for all, irrespective of their background. Linking Words
Consequently
, they would Linking Words
able
to secure a well-paid job. Add a missing verb
be able
For example
, another possible method is to fix the minimum wage for every employment. Linking Words
Thus
, slowly and gradually, the destitute would witness the prosperity in their lives and they feel content.
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However
, if the government introduces a plan to cap the salary of the affluent, could bring serious ramifications. Linking Words
This
is because they may feel displeasure, Linking Words
as a result
, the employee may migrate to developed nations, where they can earn handsome money without any restrictions. Linking Words
For instance
, recently, many wealthy Indian businessmen have migrated to different foreign countries, where they could get tax exemptions Linking Words
such
as Malta. Linking Words
Due to
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this
, some unintentional effects can bring toLinking Words
society'
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society
s
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's
finance
status Replace the word
financial
while
attempting to maintain the optimum standard of living for all.
In conclusion, in order to minimise the Linking Words
economical
imbalance of any country, capping Replace the word
economic
of
the Change preposition
apply
rich' s
income would be a feasible solution, Change noun form
rich's
according to
some. In my opinion, I firmly reiterate Linking Words
this
hardly Linking Words
bring
any positive outcome as Correct subject-verb agreement
brings
this
causes dissatisfaction among the wealthy. It is highly recommended that the authority Linking Words
requires
to find alternative solutions for the same.Wrong verb form
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