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Today's teenagers have more stressful lives than previous generations. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

#teenagers #lives #generations
The exposure towards a new
generation
 is wide. Teenagers live a stressful life in
this
 era as compared to the
last
 couple of centuries. Every age group has its own goals and milestones. Teenage is a very crucial time of human being where he does various experiments in his life.
This
 is a kind of a dream time when he sees various future motivations. Many things are affecting
on
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his decision making
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for instance
, audio, visual, social media, movies etc. Their expectations changes by
generation
 to
generation
 as per speed. Currently
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,
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due to the
vailability
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availability
 of smartphones and internet
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everything gets changed. Parents want
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ready their children as best and efficient as possible. If it takes as a challenge than it will be fruitful because electronic media means more possibilities for great future living.
On the other hand
, A competition means stress because everybody's ability is different but due to living in race kind of situation parents and teenagers face more pressure. All youngsters are not equal in the terms of grasping, learning, experimenting in various things,
Similarly
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same pattern makes them nervous since they have a habit to live in
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irtual world. Today's
generation
 is facing one big problem and
that is
 more concern about social media than real-life. They want to make carrier in film, drama, sports etc. but
o
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lder
generation
 still
believe
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 that these are secondary options.
Hence
, in my opinion, today's teenagers have more stressful lives as compared to previous people, but we should not ignore one thing
that is
 every
generation
 and their expectation always goes by hand in hand.
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