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Today the quality of life in large cities is decreasing. Discuss the causes and suggest solutions.

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Due to industrialisation and modernisation, the standard of living of the people is rising day by day. In recent times, most of the people in big cities are living a very low-quality life. In my perspective, rising population, Westernisation and environmental pollution are the major issues for
this
 type of life. Undoubtedly, people get almost all the facilities, when they live in bigger cities rather than in smaller cities. Everyone wants to live a comfortable and luxurious lifestyle, so they migrate to urban areas.
For example
, the public community has provided a park, playground to support their population.
As a result
, a number of individuals are found in cities and to accommodate them, trees are cut to build houses and colonies. Less stress space can cause air as well as water pollution. These pollutions when retaining in the atmosphere results in various respiratory and lung diseases.
Such
 kind of diseases if remain among the community, they may cause unhealthy generation.
However
, to cure a pollution problem, more trees should be planted in populated areas. It purifies the air as well as water. Trees are the lungs of nature. Environmentally friendly strategies should be followed while building houses. Every colony must have one park and lawn to maintain a green environment. In my view, fewer cars should be used by people and more stressed should be done on public transportation, which saves our surroundings from harmful gases. Awareness programmes should be organised to spread awareness among the people about saving the environment. To conclusion, everyone should take care of the environment to live a good quality life and should take care of everything that it should not be detrimental to the health of the people of the community.
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