In many countries imprisonment is the most common solution to crimes. However, some people believe that better education will be a more effective solution . To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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people have been criming

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some of us prefer to live in

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. I believe that imprisonment is the best solution to crimes. But

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them is better than to regain the people to

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is not a guilty 100%. In

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education support he or she can gain a skill

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a job easily when he/she be free again. But I strongly believe that there is no excuse for a killing a person for there people education is not enough they have to stay in

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, in some countries like Scandinavian,they educate the people who are in

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as I mentioned before some factors are very important. In conclusion

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In many countries imprisonment is the most common solution to crimes. However, some people believe that better education will be a more effective solution . To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

Your opinion

New forms of money are becoming extremely popular nowadays. Is this a positive development or adding risk to the system? Should new money technology face greater regulation and scrutiny? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Science is more useful than human judgement in stopping crime. To what extent do you agree?

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