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In many countries imprisonment is the most common solution to crimes. However, some people believe that better education will be a more effective solution . To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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people have been criming
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 behaviour they have been punishment. We all born for living a
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some of us prefer to live in
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 because of their crimes others are living in
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. I believe that imprisonment is the best solution to crimes. But
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classify
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them is better than to regain the people to
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if I person
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bread to eat
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 is not a guilty 100%. In
prison
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education support he or she can gain a skill
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 maybe after that he or she can
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 a job easily when he/she be free again. But I strongly believe that there is no excuse for a killing a person for there people education is not enough they have to stay in
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 end of their
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, in some countries like Scandinavian,they educate the people who are in
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est way to give them a
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 to hold their
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georophical
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geographical
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as I mentioned before some factors are very important. In conclusion
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I don't agree to educate them
prison
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 is strongly
necessraly
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necessary
necessarily
 for the crime. I wish nobody chose that way but to live in safe
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 way is very important.

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