In many countries imprisonment is the most common solution to crimes. However, some people believe that better education will be a more effective solution . To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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people have been criming

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some of us prefer to live in

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because of their crimes others are living in

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. I believe that imprisonment is the best solution to crimes. But

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them is better than to regain the people to

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is not a guilty 100%. In

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education support he or she can gain a skill

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a job easily when he/she be free again. But I strongly believe that there is no excuse for a killing a person for there people education is not enough they have to stay in

prison

end of their

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, in some countries like Scandinavian,they educate the people who are in

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est way to give them a

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factors are very important because I believe it is not possible for the other regions. Actually

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as I mentioned before some factors are very important. In conclusion

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I don't agree to educate them

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Your opinion

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