In many countries imprisonment is the most common solution to crimes. However, some people believe that better education will be a more effective solution . To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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is not a guilty 100%. In

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a job easily when he/she be free again. But I strongly believe that there is no excuse for a killing a person for there people education is not enough they have to stay in

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, in some countries like Scandinavian,they educate the people who are in

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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In many countries imprisonment is the most common solution to crimes. However, some people believe that better education will be a more effective solution . To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

Your opinion

Whether or not a person achieves their aims in life is mostly related to luck. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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the most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?