More and more people are moving away from an agricultural background to relocate to cities in order to look for work. What will the consequences for this? What solution can you offer?

It is an irrefutable fact, that peasants in all over the world, are moving to urban cities, looking for a better way of life. In the following up paragraphs will
analize
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analyze
widely
this
situation and as a conclusion
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I will give a resolution for
this
situation.
First
, agriculture is an old way of work. Agronomy was born with humanity.
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, most of the time, on earth´s natural
weather
.
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is something very risky because people that work land can not control
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eather. So, sometimes climate is good for harvest and making plants grow up.
However
, sometimes it does not happen like
this
.
Therefore
, migration
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occurs
. Even international migration.
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two
centruries
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centuries
ago, Europe lived the worst
weather
ever. Lack of water was in everywhere. So, people decided to come to America, looking for a better quality of life.
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, as the Americans say looking for"The American Dream".
Second
, sometimes it happens that
peasents
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peasants
can be paid better if the grew up plants like marihuana or plants that produce
cocain
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cocaine
.
For example
in Colombia
agricultors
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agricultures
agricultural
cultive
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cultivate
fruits and vegetables in one part of their land. But a big part of their land can be used for plants that produce drugs. Cultivation of these plants
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not allowed by
goverments
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governments
government
. So, when a
goverment
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government
finds out that
peaseants
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peasants
are
cultiving
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cultivating
these kind
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of plants, they destroy their harvest and with
this
, making them run to the city. To recapitulate,
peasent
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peasant
please
emigrate because of their bad harvest, and
also
because
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overnment do not
allows
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some kind of plants to be cultivated.
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, it is important (in my personal opinion) the internet use.
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nternet can
helps
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agricultures out to know more about
weather
behaviour as well as be informed about the best way to cultivate
diferent
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different
crops.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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