More and more people are moving away from an agricultural background to relocate to cities in order to look for work. What will the consequences for this? What solution can you offer?

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It is an irrefutable fact, that peasants in all over the world, are moving to urban cities, looking for a better way of life. In the following up paragraphs will

analize

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situation and as a conclusion

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I will give a resolution for

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situation.

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, agriculture is an old way of work. Agronomy was born with humanity.

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, most of the time, on earth´s natural

weather

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is something very risky because people that work land can not control

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eather. So, sometimes climate is good for harvest and making plants grow up.

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, sometimes it does not happen like

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, migration

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. Even international migration.

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two

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centuries

ago, Europe lived the worst

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ever. Lack of water was in everywhere. So, people decided to come to America, looking for a better quality of life.

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, as the Americans say looking for"The American Dream".

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, sometimes it happens that

peasents

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peasants

can be paid better if the grew up plants like marihuana or plants that produce

cocain

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cocaine

For example

in Colombia

agricultors

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agricultures

agricultural

cultive

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cultivate

fruits and vegetables in one part of their land. But a big part of their land can be used for plants that produce drugs. Cultivation of these plants

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not allowed by

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governments

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. So, when a

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government

finds out that

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peasants

are

cultiving

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cultivating

these kind

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of plants, they destroy their harvest and with

this

, making them run to the city. To recapitulate,

peasent

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peasant

please

emigrate because of their bad harvest, and

also

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overnment do not

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some kind of plants to be cultivated.

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nternet can

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agricultures out to know more about

weather

behaviour as well as be informed about the best way to cultivate

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different

crops.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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More and more people are moving away from an agricultural background to relocate to cities in order to look for work. What will the consequences for this? What solution can you offer?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to cooperate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary schools rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Although many people value their public parks, this space could be better used for other purposes such as residential areas for the ever growing population or to develop business and boost economies. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

Many people today believe that we should abolish prisons because of their numerous problems. What are the problems with prisons? What solutions can be implemented to address these problems?