In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

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Obesity has become one of the most serious health
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the whole world. It can be seen easily that in most of the nations,
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verage weight of the masses is escalating and the levels of their physical fitness and health are declining. The main causes behind
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issue are
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as false eating habits along with less physical workouts which can
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be eliminated by making a few changes in our lifestyle. Despite a lot of advancements in the healthcare system, the rate of obese people is escalating at
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normously high pace. Why? The most
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cause for it is our unhealthy food intake. As most of the persons in
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fast pace world are working which results in less
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to cook nutritious food at home that
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them toward
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meals.
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results in no
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, as most of the persons are busy, they rarely get
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pursue
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activities ;
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verage weight of people is increasing.
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, nowadays most
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eople spend only an hour per week on any workout ;
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, the ration was far opposite in the past. There are numerous solutions to
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that can be proved beneficial to eradicate it. The most effective remedy might be to make a daily plan -
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table- which will
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help
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people to organise their
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in a logical way so that they might get free
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to do any workout, even half an hour to devote on any exercise daily can be beneficial to combat obesity. Apart from
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of having fast food or readymade meals, persons should tend towards homemade
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meals which definitely will give
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ositive result to eliminate
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research revealed that eliminating fast foods from regular routine helped to reduced obesity by 60%. To conclude, Even though obesity is the most burning issue or major
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all over the globe, it can be solved with few measures. The
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lies in our lifestyles, and if steps can be taken by everyone, it will definitely reduce
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • obesity
  • overweight
  • physical activity
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • exercise
  • unhealthy diet
  • fast food
  • urbanization
  • modernization
  • stress
  • awareness
  • education
  • government intervention
  • policies
  • promotion
  • sports
  • fitness programs
  • health education
  • taxation
  • public transportation
  • infrastructure
  • parks
  • recreational spaces
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