Some people think that in order to produce a happy society, it is necessary to ensure that there is only a small difference between the earnings of the richest and poorest. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is believed that only a tiny gap in income between
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wealth
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people
and poor ones makes humans
be
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happier. I would argue
this
opinion
due to
the fact that it will increase an economic disbalance in the world and
also
being fully content with life
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always relate to
money
. In my opinion,
happiness
is not determined only
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the quantity of
money
a
person
possesses. It means that
money
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to an end, but not the method of being happy. Individuals feel
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pleasure
pursuing
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goals, going through the whole process of achieving dreams and
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experiencing a feeling of
happiness
.
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I have always felt on cloud 9 when I have been accomplishing my goals, especially
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,
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entering
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in France. That feeling gave me
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harmony and I felt so balanced and happy, which was not about my financial status.
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nothing to do with
money
, no matter at what level class a
person
is, the richest or the poorest The other thing about the correlation between making enough
money
and being happy is that it completely does not make any sense
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if no one can support actions a
person
does towards being happy.
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people
, the trusted ones like family and friends around - make
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a
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human
being
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more purposeful and blessed.
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Jeff Bezos, CEO of Amazon company, speaks
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volume
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about how he realized what really makes him the luckiest. In his latest interview
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BBC, Jeff took a wrap off his formula of
happiness
, which is not obviously
money
he makes, but his beloved family who inspire him to earn.
As a result
,
people
need
people
for
happiness
but
money
.
To conclude
, I do not support a determination of opinion to be happy as to shorten the difference between
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class and a low-class, as not bunches of dollars makes a
person
happy.
However
, what makes a human feel literally joyful is a community beside and trusted
people
around.
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