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Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness?

#happiness #life #factors
Being happy is likely everyone wants to achieve.
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it isn't that easy to be as well.
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 index is
diffcult
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difficult
 to define since there are numerous criteria for a
person
 to be happy.
Happiness
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differ
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 from
person
 to
person
,
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some might be happy if they have a car while others buying a home or having a guitar .These materialistic things might make people happy.
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on the other hand
 like
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meditation
 and listening to music
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 makes people happy but
this
happiness
 is not for all.
Happiness
 comes within to each of them regardless
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what they do. Seeing
this
 can we generalize
happiness
?It is close to impossible to define
happiness
. The factors to define a
person
's
happines
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happiness
 comes from his inner feelings.
Although
 many are happy with what they do and what they are.Reaching your goals by hard work will definitely bring
happiness
, again goals differ from
person
 to
person
 .A
person
 goal can be becoming a singer or it can
be buy
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 a home or it can be getting a job.
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 having
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obby which might help you feel happy and entertainment
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 helps in being happy.
Happiness
also
 impacts your approach on things, you will be more confident and postie
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thought
through
throughout
 the time. In conclusion, being happy in daily life will bring positive energy within a
person
 and help a
person
 to achieve more and more goals.
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