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In some countries students pay the collage and universities fees themselves, but in other it is paid by the government. Do the advantages of government money outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is the most debatable question, whether students pay a college fee and university fee on their own or it must be paid by the
government
. I totally agree with the
government
 should not pay fees of the students. It has more pros outweigh cons.
First
 and foremost, the regime earns its
money
 through obedient taxpayers. So, if it spends
this
money
 to pay fees of the students,
then
 there would be dissatisfaction among them, because of it they will start tax evasion, which is not good for any country. Tax runs the nation.
Moreover
, the students may swap their fields rapidly, if they may find it difficult, owing to
this
 it would be wastage of huge amount of the
government
'
money
.
In addition
 to the above, pupils do not value education, if it will be free. They do not take seriously, because parents might not bother to observe and ask them. They
also
 misuse
this
 benefit greatly.
For example
, our
government
 made state transportation free for girl students and they misused
this
 advantage for their personal causes
such
 as they lived in a hostel for an academic career but, when they went to their homes they used free passes for only one trip in a month.
On the other hand
,
this
money
 ought to spend on other developments in the nation. The state, not only improve public infrastructure and transportation but
also
 improve administrative facilities and defence. Due to these, people should realize that their
money
 must be spent wisely on a good cause. There are many renewable energy projects, which require a huge capital investment and it is certain that they must give more benefits in the future. To conclude, all students come from the middle-income group, so they are able enough to pay their fees themselves because it is for their personal careers. The
government
 must use its
money
 for development and betterment of the nation.
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