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A local college is having an international day. You want to speak about your country to students from different cultures. Write a letter to the college head. In your letter: Tell him/her about the topics that you are going to talk about Explain why would they be of interest to the students Ask about any arrangements that you need to make to give the talk

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Dear Sir, I am writing to express my interest and seeking your permission to speak
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 the event organized by your college on the international student day. I get to know that you have a group of foreign students, and I have chosen a topic named "Bangali diversity" to present in
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 of them. With that topic, I will talk about some of our local cultures,
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bengali
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 new year celebration and winter cake festival.
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, I will
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 provide some interesting
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 of local tourist spots.
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 will not only broaden the overseas students' level of
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,
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 but
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 encourage them to promote our nation
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worldwide. I think the
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 to me as I will express that with visual effects and with some interesting stories. Mention able that, I am a motivational speaker and have extensive experience
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persuasion
. I required some
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 for
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 which are a microphone,
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multimedia and a
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. I expect that all these amenities will be available
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 the stage with your
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 decoration. In
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 that special day. Yours sincerely, Taslima
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