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In many countries students are engaged in some sort of paid work . Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibilities. What is your opinion?

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I believe in a quote "If you are good at something, never do it for free".
This
 is a quote from a movie. It really relates to the scenario. The paid task has been doing by students in many countries. Is it wrong for the students to work and get paid? No, It enhances our not only our experience but
also
 make us understand our responsibilities in the family. I feel one has to do the job when they reach a certain age. Even though some people believe it as completely wrong, they still know that they have to job to meet daily expenses. I see students working under the clock to meet their education and living expenses.
Furthermore
, it provides them with knowledge and experience along with pay. It teaches them how to spend and save money at a young age. Working at a young age makes you think mature. Nowadays, we see many spoiled kids on the internet. They are wasting their time in social media and it is a slow poison for them. Social media should be intended more like news across the globe or educational related but it is not.
Instead
,they should start networking using social media. If it put to good purpose, a student will benefit in future. I am grateful that students are using a social media platform like Linkedin for their own good. In my opinion, I firmly believe that students should do work and be paid. It teaches them the reality of society. They should
also
 meet various people on their journey. It is their right to work and get paid.
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