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Since the 18th century technological advances have replaced people in the workplace. With today’s technology this process is happening at a greater rate. Technology is increasingly responsible for unemployment. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In the modern world, technology has become one of the most essentials. Some
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 it has taken over people's day jobs and it happening at a rapid rate. And the world claims that growth of the automation is accountable for raising the Unemployment problem.
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, I partly agree with the above statement and throughout
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, to create the software you need human knowledge.
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, people who are experienced in Information Technology subjects will have more jobs opening than ever before.
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, a study done in London found out that,
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 their unemployment rate has reduced by 55% because of the growth of technological advance.
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, it is certain that automation generates more occupations to society.
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 and the value of the product can cause
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society. In many countries supermarket,self-checkout counters are a common thing. It can reduce the amount of labour by reducing cashiers.
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, a few years ago I lost my casual position in a supermarket due to the instalment of new self-checkout counters.
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, automation has caused cutback since it lowers the production price and saves
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. To sum up, even though, the Advance of technology causing fewer job openings because of
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 and cost-saving, there are more new IT positions coming to the community to reduce cutback.
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