In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

It is expected there will be a higher proportion of old people than young people in the future in some countries. Do you think it is positive or negative development?

Today many people do not know their neighbors in large cities What problem does this cause? What can be done about this?

some people believe studying abroad is important because it expands person's konwledge and undrestanding of the world. others feel that is better to study at home because that is the best way to prepare for a career in the student's own country . discuss both these views, and give your opinoin.

Some people think that sports involving violence, such as boxing and martial arts, should be banned from TV as well as from international sporting competitions. To what extend do you agree?