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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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ajor contribution in countries economy as it is used by
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ocal public. Many countries spend
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a lot
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 the
railway
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xisting public
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ood option to make it more
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 will discuss both points and
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 give my opinion. Railways are
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est invention
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technology
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acility. In many countries bulk of
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railway
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faster and facilitate people in
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ifferent manner. As railways are only
transport
system
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ation
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money
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railway
 lines and
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modernize
modernized
railway
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ew form will only be
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beneficial
 for travellers. Because
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 the most
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useful
 way of transporting goods and
poeple
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people
 is railways all around the
world
. Another best reason to invest
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 railways is
technology
, every nation has to run with current and upgraded
technology
 so making changes in railways are the most important factor.
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, Japan is way more ahead in
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orld, it
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world
 fastest trains and railways lines which is a
world
 record. On the other side, people believe that to improvise
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urrent situation of
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ransport
system
 is
also
 very crucial, Local people use transportation
system
 on their daily basis for migrating or for their regular use.
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xisting
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ehicle and seating arrangements should be taken care for ease transportation of public.
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 countries
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opulation is very high, so as
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sage of
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transportation
 is. So to invest
on
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 existing
transport
system
 will be good because
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ocal public, villagers and outsiders are
completly
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completely
 depend on public
transport
. In conclusion, Investing
money
 in Existing
transport
 is important,
however
, spending on improvements
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ailway is far more beneficial rather than other modes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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