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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. Do you agree or disagree?

#universities #numbers #students
Dear Recruiter, My name is Yiqun Zhang. I am a business analyst at Virtusa Corporation. I am writing
this
 letter to express my interest in the financial analyst position of
SCAD
. My desire to work for
SCAD
 started with an enlightening conversation with a retired professor of
SCAD
 when I travelled to Savanna
last
 year. We discussed
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issues of education, social media, and
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 is beneficial for a human’s well-being and the quality of
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 education contributed to its prosperity.
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rt field. I am excited to learn that
SCAD
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niversity Website. I believe I am qualified for
this
 role. To my understanding, the University is looking for a person with data analytics skills and business acumen. Being a consultant at Virtusa, I have three-year experience in identifying operational inefficiency for clients by constructing multiple financial KPI. I
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inancial model. I appreciate if you could spend
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ew minutes to see if I am qualified for
this
 role. I look forward to discussing my fitness for
SCAD
 with you. Sincerely, Yiqun Zhang
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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