Some of the methods used in advertising are unethical and unacceptable in today’s society. To what extent do you agree with this view?

Although
nowadays commercials are essential for creating
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ositive brand image, there is a
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the
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eneral belief that some of the adverts make use of immoral or inappropriate content. I fully agree with
this
view.
First
of all, it is important to mention, that some adverts create
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nrealistic or misleading image of the product resulting in customers dissatisfaction.
For instance
, diet pills are claimed to be an easy way for getting slim,
however
, no information about possible side effects
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mentioned in the ads.
As a result
,
such
ads just give empty promises to people, who understand that there are many hidden details only after purchasing
this
product.
Furthermore
, most commercials are really disturbing and forcing people to make
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mpulsive decision. A person may have no need in purchasing a particular thing,
however
, the more he or she
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to the ads, the more one feels the urge to make a purchase.
Moreover
, some advertisements and promotions specifically target children and teenagers, who are especially vulnerable to any pressure. After watching the ads with their
favorite
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stars they can’t just resist the urge to buy a product, which may lead to a damaging effect if they don’t get it. It
also
creates
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dditional financial burden for their parents trying to put up with the demand
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their children and make them feel satisfied. To conclude, I would like to say that
although
advertising plays an important role in marketing, it still has a lot of undesirable effects, which should be better regulated.
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