The Government has a responsibility to its citizens to ensure their safety. Therefore, some people believe that government should increase spending on defense but spend less on social benefits. To what extend do you agree.

A nations ruler has many duties to offer its citizens.Some of the duties are tourism development ,providing quality education , economic development, taking enough safety measures of the country and encouraging social activities.few suggest obligation of the government should be more on
saftty
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safety
of the country
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allocate more budget on nations
safty
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safety
measures than allocating on social matters. I strongly agree with the statement that
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the duty of the
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to spend more on countries safety.
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, nowadays the international terrorism attack has been a major threat to a country
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providing security to its people can only be done by its rulers.During
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udgeting process
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the members of
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parliament
should allocate more on
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ecurity of the dependant people
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therefore
More defence officials should be recruited .To cite an example after the terrorist attack in
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last
year in church and hotels more policemen are recruited for guarding schools and churches.
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, not only international attackers but
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national terrorism is
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agrarian.
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, in Srilanka for more than 30 years had the battle between Tamil terrorist named tigers and local army force so our late president
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more money in purchasing on defence types of equipment and recruited more officials to defence and won the battle successfully.
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, in today's world child kidnapping ,woman harassment and
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cases are increasing gradually comparing to its past records
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more CCTV camera's ,surveillance cameras and satellites should be installed to overcome the threat to innocent kids and woman. a good example is a survey conducted by university students the woman harassment has been reduced to a certain amount after the use of CCTV cameras . To conclude, the citizen of a bucolic could be only happy and healthy if only enough safety and security considerations are taken into actions by the governors.social consideration could be a
second
thought and the priority should be guarding the nationals.
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