Students in school should learn academic subjects and pass exams. Other skills such as cookery, dressmaking and woodwork can be learnt well from family and friends. Do you agree and disagree?

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chool curriculum is crucial in determining the future of the aspirants.
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it is sometimes believed that teaching home science is more significant than fundamental topics. I personally, support the latter's viewpoint as it has a long term effect on one's life.
To begin
with, by learning and passing the core subjects, prepare them to apply for various jobs.
In other words
, if anyone wants to be hired by employers , the potential candidates require to study either Science or Mathematics.
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, presently, there is a huge competition between the job hunters, those who have relevant qualification would be selected by companies.
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, many multi-national companies recruit only skilled and knowledgeable applicants, they never look someone good at cooking,
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or fireworks and
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, it is clear how much significant it is to learn academic courses than domestic Science. Another fact is that
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learning them have many implications in our day to day life.
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, to carry out simple tasks, require
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knowledge of basic subjects.
For instance
, calculations, including, additions and multiplications need whenever does shopping if anyone fails to do so, would be considered as an illiterate, eventually, they may not be recruited by most of the employers.
In contrast
, knowing how to prepare food, design dresses, or collecting firewoods can be done by everyone with the assistance of family and peers, for which, there is no talent or skill
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to learn them. In conclusion, people have a different opinion on teaching fundamental or domestic subjects is far more important. In my opinion, I firmly believe that the basic course
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to be given focus than anything else since these can prepare them to find jobs and lead a successful life.
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