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Failure is proof that the desire wasn’t strong enough. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer.

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Human generation is always racing and compare who is
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atter for several people. Some people think that
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 means the
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 does not
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 with 100% desire. As per my point of view, I do not believe that
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 is a tag that
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 does not put full effort. To commence with, life is full of ups and downs. Every moment we live is a challenge and we can not imagine or care about
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esult. The result is coming in mind when people are doing something different.
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, numerous of scientist has proof that they worked many experiments and only some of the are succussed. But, that not means their
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 not appreciated in
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orld.
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 is proof that every
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 has some value, even though
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 does not meet the target.
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, Sir Thomas Edition, when he invented the light bulb, he says that
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 know 100 methods that
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 not light the bulb.
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 statement encourages many people to dare to
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 on something new.
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trong movement that changes that
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 end of the something we desire. On the other hand, the fear of
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 has increase chances to change the mind and do not put 100% focus
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 the
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. Some people stop to think new because of chances of fear and what
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ublic can think or talk about it. To summarize, The
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 is not a statement of a
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id not give full desire on that.
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,
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proof that a
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 is trying to move in life. The
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ind of step of a big success.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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