Scientists believe that the world is in danger due to environmental changes. Some people say that personal lifestyle changes should be made to reduce the damage to environment, while others think that the government should do something to help. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, environmental changes are becoming a huge threat to the world as some pupil

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that personal lifestyle should be changed to decrease the effect of

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damage, while other says

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should be the responsibility of political parties. Both the sides will be discussed later in

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opinion at the end.

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with personal lifestyle, overuse of vehicles just to show the status cause the pollution heavily in the

environment

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, which pollute the fresh air and become the reason of several

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as breathing problems and infection in lungs. To illustrate, there are multiple cars or bikes in just one household, to ride the distance of 2

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, which could be covered by the walk.

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, a person

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of using limited resources of water and

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, he wastes these resources,which

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puts the detrimental

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on the

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conomy has to use the more coal to generate electricity and the level of water is falling down constantly, which is a serious issue. On the other side,

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overnment should make new laws and regulations to protect the natural resources so that future generations could

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take advantages of these sources.

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overnment can charge taxes on the vehicles which create

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more noises and pollution.

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, people will be demotivated to buy

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motorvehicles

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motor vehicles

due to governmental charges.

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awareness among society regarding the issues, which are responsible to damage the natural

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. In my opinion, individually nobody will be able to improve the condition of an

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due to various reasons, which are discussed in the above essay,

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goverenment

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and society should work together to make a new and improved world.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Scientists believe that the world is in danger due to environmental changes. Some people say that personal lifestyle changes should be made to reduce the damage to environment, while others think that the government should do something to help. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

Formal examinations are the only effective way to assess a student's performance. Continual assessment, such as coursework and projects, is not a satisfactory way to do this. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Universities should take the same number of men and women in each major. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both veiws and give your opinion?

Influence of human beings on the world's ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss of bio- diversity. What are the primary causes of loss of biodiversity? What solutions can you suggest?

With the improvements in today’s health care, society has to care for more and more elderly people. Do you feel that society will be able to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly people today and how can it be managed?