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It is too expensive to look after and repair old buildings. This money should be spent on building modern buildings instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#repair #buildings #money
The demand for
a
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new housing will always be pressing and some people think that to suffice
this
 demand
money
 should be spent on the new houses rather than on a continuous annual repairing of the old ones. I partially agree with
this
 opinion because some of the old buildings require repair and, even though the new housing is more reliable and safe for usage, they can carry historical and cultural value for the society.
To begin
 with, new buildings are definitely reliable in terms of construction and they are planned, designed and built in accordance with the modern standards of housing, which make modern housing worth to be spent some
money
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older accommodation, the new premises would have a constantly working water supply system, gutter pipes and safe electrical wires, which are basic but necessary for living.
In addition
, the housing built by modern construction workers is considered to be reliable in terms of having a stable foundation, waterproof rooftops, and heating system as well.
For example
,
J
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apanese government is relying more on modern,
earthquake resistant
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 buildings while the old ones fall down gradually as every time an earthquake happens. Modern housing standards provide people with safer, fairly reliable, and resilient accommodation so more
that is
 why some
money
 should be spent on them.
On the other hand
, there are many old buildings considered to be historically valuable and to carry a cultural meaning for
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society.
For instance
, the Ministers’ house,
in other words
, the Big Ben, a cultural heritage
that is
 regarded as the main landmark of London, is closed for repair till 2021 and, actually, worth every penny spent on the recovery. As
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Big Ben, there are a lot of culturally valuable buildings worldwide that need to be repaired for the simple reason that it can serve as a landmark and a site-seeing. Even though there is a demand for the new buildings, some of the old ones are in need of repair and cultural value for
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society makes
money
 spent on them worth its cost. To conclude,
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why the
money
 has to be distributed equally on building new accommodation as well as on repairing the valuable old buildings.
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