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Women are better at childcare than men therefore they should focus more on raising children and less on their working life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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There is no doubt that
childcare
 is a hectic responsibility. There are some people who think that mothers are a better carer, when compared with fathers, due to
this
, females should look after children rather than going for work. I completely disagree with
this
 statement since caring is a learnt skill, anybody can take care
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their offsprings, irrespective of gender.
To begin
 with, either
of
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parents can care for their child, it is not exclusively for ladies.
This
 is because developing
a
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skill in
childcare
 can be learnt and would be incorporated in real life.
For example
, in the UK, both husband and wife are trained in parenting skills to make sure that they are capable of doing things.
Additionally
, many modern and developed countries follow the same and there gender discrimination is minimal;
therefore
, there
is
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 no scientific back-ups to support
this
 notion. Another factor here is that benevolent bullying which means by appreciating motherhood and caring nature make mothers sit at home and watch family affairs.
Consequently
, the productive and mature workforce would stay outside the work-force.
Moreover
, in western culture,
for instance
, there are many fathers who hold the position of homemaker and doing
childcare
 while the wives go to an office.
Thus
, it is clear that anybody available at home, either husband or wife, can nature the offsprings, no need to assign a particular gender for the same. In conclusion, people have a belief that
childcare
 is wested to females,
as a result
, they have been forced to sit at home to nurse children. I firmly think that
this
 situation can not be justifiable since
this
 is not an inherited talent.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender roles
  • nurturing
  • empathy
  • sensitivity
  • maternal instinct
  • paternal involvement
  • child's development
  • work-life balance
  • gender equality
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