Some people believe that individuals are responsible for their own personal happiness. Others argue that happiness can be affected by other factors. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Happiness

is the basic human emotion everyone want. People feel happy for different reasons and for different persons. Few people opine that individuals are responsible for their own

happiness

, while others think it can be affected by other factors.

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essay will discuss both views and conclude with my opinion. Most of the time in our lives, different occasions and different relations with people bring

happiness

to us. The way they behave or treat us will make us happy. Sometimes, success and achievements can make us happy. In

this

world

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everyone likes only the moments, people, things, food anything which can make them over the moon. People

also

want to spend

money

on their

happiness

. Few buy luxury goods, few donate

money

for charities and others save

money

for future generations. All these things in the world affect their

happiness

and people have a strong desire for

such

items.

On the other hand

, many people find

happiness

within themselves. They search for inner beauty and peace through meditation and by practising yoga. These people never find

happiness

not only in the materialistic world

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but

also

in people. They maintain neutrality and complete their responsibilities without any expectations. They never search

happiness

in the

money

or in things. Spiritually, they always connected to

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divine power and always in a happy mood. To conclude, is all external factors responsible for our own

happiness

? Personally, I don't think so. I believe it is always an individual who is responsible for his own

happiness

. It's not easy to achieve that, that said practice and neutrality will help us to experience the ultimate

happiness

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Some people believe that individuals are responsible for their own personal happiness. Others argue that happiness can be affected by other factors. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

pie chart and table about fish imported and source in the US

It is suggested that everyone wants to own a car, a TV and a fridge. Do the disadvantages to society outweigh the advantages?

In spite of the advances made in agriculture,many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single sex schools or co-educational Schools. Some people think that children going to single sex schools have the disadvantages later in life. To what extent do you agree?

Nowadays in many countries women have full time jobs. Therefore, it is logical to share household tasks evenly between men and women. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?