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Some people believe that individuals are responsible for their own personal happiness. Others argue that happiness can be affected by other factors. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Happiness
 is the basic human emotion everyone want. People feel happy for different reasons and for different persons. Few people opine that individuals are responsible for their own
happiness
, while others think it can be affected by other factors.
This
 essay will discuss both views and conclude with my opinion. Most of the time in our lives, different occasions and different relations with people bring
happiness
 to us. The way they behave or treat us will make us happy. Sometimes, success and achievements can make us happy. In
this
 world
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everyone likes only the moments, people, things, food anything which can make them over the moon. People
also
 want to spend
money
 on their
happiness
. Few buy luxury goods, few donate
money
 for charities and others save
money
 for future generations. All these things in the world affect their
happiness
 and people have a strong desire for
such
 items.
On the other hand
, many people find
happiness
 within themselves. They search for inner beauty and peace through meditation and by practising yoga. These people never find
happiness
 not only in the materialistic world
,
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 but
also
 in people. They maintain neutrality and complete their responsibilities without any expectations. They never search
happiness
 in the
money
 or in things. Spiritually, they always connected to
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divine power and always in a happy mood. To conclude, is all external factors responsible for our own
happiness
? Personally, I don't think so. I believe it is always an individual who is responsible for his own
happiness
. It's not easy to achieve that, that said practice and neutrality will help us to experience the ultimate
happiness
.
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