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More and more people work at home and study at home with the development of computer technology.Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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There is no doubt that there are many changes
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appen in the
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 and education.
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, purely, occurs due to the computerisation. I strongly support the standpoint since I believe that
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 has many merits than drawbacks.
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-life balance, which means they could enjoy both personal and professional life together.
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, the staff able to
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 in the comfort of the home and
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 trend has many other advantages
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, by using
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 development, especially for women, they could attend family
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functions
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child-rearing
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hild rearing process and free from tiring
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 travelling.
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, those who
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 from their space can feel much motivated and it is
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ositive trend. Another fact is here that regarding students, they can access to the foreign university education.
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computers and the internet make it possible to attend online classes and the problem of geographical distances and visa processing can be eliminated.
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, if computers have not been introduced in place, students would have found difficulties in doing research and collecting
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ecessary information for the same.
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, it is clear that, without the computerisation, our modern education system may not be reached, whatever progress which has been made so far. In conclusion, the latest information technology has revolutionised the way we live, both in
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education
 and employment sectors. In my opinion, I think that it is a progressive movement since
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 assists to balance the
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 and life and studies. It is highly recommended the utilization of the technology should be increased.

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