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The diagram reveals, the process of manufacturing instant noodles. overall, it can be seen that there are as many as eight stages are involved in
this
 procedure. In the initial
stage
, the
flour
 is stored in the storage silos through the ven, which brought the
flour
 from outside. After that, the
flour
 is sent to the mixture, where water and oil are added.
Then
this
 mixture is sent to the later
stage
, where it turned into the dough sheets.
This
 mixture is sent via rollers. The dough sheets cut the
flour
 into the strips with the help of the roller cutters. After that, these dough sheets are sent to the fifth
stage
, where they are converted into the noodles discs. The following
stage
 is the most important, in which two processes are taken place simultaneously.
First
, the discs are fried in oil and
then
 they are dried in the dryer. These discs are packed into the small cups, where vegetables and spices are added.
Finally
, labelling and sealing processes are taken place. After that, they are ready for selling.
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