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Over the last few decades, there has been an increase in international tourism. Some people think that tourism is beneficial for local communities and should be encouraged. To what extent do you agree or disagree

#decades #tourism #people #communities
Tourism
 is the word that
excite
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 everybody to go
outisde
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outside
 the world and find new things. Some people made
this
 a passion or for some employment. International
tourism
 increasing day by day and its really
benifical
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beneficial
 for people and
aslo
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also
 encourage them. According to my opinion,
i
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am agree
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 with
this
 content and elaborate in
furture
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future
 paragraphs. To begins with, technology really helps to increase
the
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tourism
 everywhere in the world because of the photographers or videomakers. The benefit of the
continatal
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continental
continual
tourism
 is the
money
,
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 like if
forgieners
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foreigners
 come to visit in India, they will bring
frogein
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foreign
money
 and they have to exchange their
money
 into Indian currency through banks which will grow international rate.
Secondly
, it is
benefical
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beneficial
 for local communities people like food and clothing
shoapkeepers
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shopkeepers
 or hotel owners or transportation which
also
 help them to earn
money
 and grow their businesses.
Furturmore
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Furthermore
,
tourism
also
 encouraging
n
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ew generation to participate in
tourism
 and become a tour guide. As many as
t
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our guide in the country
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is
was
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as much
hlepful
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helpful
 for another country people to find new things in
diffrent
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different
 continent.
Moreover
, it
also
encourage
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 to those people who are really good in
thier
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their
other
 businesses
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,
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for example
, if one individual is expert to making beautiful buildings, visitors more encourage him to make more new art or beautiful
palces
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places
such
 as home or any building
desgin
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design
 or any statue.
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