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Nowadays most green energy is becoming ever more prevalent in both  developed and developing countries. Some argue they greatly reduce costs and are  better for the environment, others believe they are a serious threat to energy security.  Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The world today uses more renewable sources over other oil sources to generate power. It is clear to see why
this
 has become a popular new trend, but as in everything else, benefits and drawbacks need to be considered. Considering both sides of the coin, I believe in encouraging green energy as it's advantages outweigh the drawbacks.
Firstly
, some rather obvious concerns raised by detractors of green energy are dependency on the climate and unpredictability in terms of preserving. To elaborate, solar panels can be effectively used only under higher temperatures, which cannot be guaranteed every season.
Similarly
,
this
 is applicable for other natural resources
such
 as wind-power and rainwater harvesting, etc.
Thus
, it is a reasonable argument from one set of the public.
On the other hand
, it is undeniable that renewable sources are infinitely available, and currently, the oils on which we are completely dependent should certainly get depleted at one point.
Besides
, fossil fuels released are extremely harmful to the environment that can immensely unbalance the ecosystem, whereas there is no
such
 worry with natural resources as they are both environmentally and economically friendly. To illustrate, currently, we had been spending a lot on importing crude from the middle east.
Instead
 of
this
, why can we not rely on the naturally available sources and generate the essential power? All in all, it is evident that, though there is a certain degree of dependency on the climatic conditions, we can find some alternatives
such
 as saving via battery power or other innovative approaches to make use of its best.
Hence
, my viewpoint is to support renewable energy consumption
that is
 eco friendly.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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