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A friend from another country is moving to your city for work. He / she has asked you for advice about living in your city. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter suggest an interesting part of the city to live in describe the public transport in your city say how your friend can meet new people there

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Dear Panda, I am so excited to know you'll be moving to Mumbai. The southern part of the
city
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, will all its British architecture, is one of the best places to stay,
besides
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also
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 live in the same area.
South-Mumbai
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South Mumbai

The word South-Mumbai doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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also
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 has an edge over other residential areas as it boasts a plethora of public transport. Isn't your office located in Andheri? From
South-Mumbai
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South Mumbai

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direct local-train connectivity there along with buses. There are two more railway lines which will take you to other parts of the
city
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

. If in case you are worried that you'll be all alone here, no need to worry at all. Many people move to Mumbai every day. The
city
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 council organizes bi-weekly meet for new people where you'll be able to meet new people and make new friends.
Besides
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, Kala Ghoda, the
city
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

's biggest festival will be in 10 days after you move.
This
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 festival will serve you as a platform to make amazing new connections. Cannot wait to meet you in person once you are here. Your friend, Shubham

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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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