Today, large shopping centres and shopping malls are more common than small shops. Is it positive or negative trend?

There is no doubt that the mushrooming of big stores
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very common. I personally
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that
this
is a progressive trend because it saves our money and
time
in a great extend.
To begin
with, while purchasing products from shopping malls certainly brings many advantages. The obvious one is that the amount of
time
, a precious commodity, which we can save.
This
is because In these establishments, where they
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various items in a way that the customers can easily
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.
For example
, there are different sections for women, men, and child and even, the products are categorised to catch attention, by doing
this
, shopping can be done within a limited period of
time
.
By contrast
, in small local shops where the consumers depend on
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to pick them products;
thus
it is clear that how the big shopping centres minimise the wastage of
time
.Another merit of the super or
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is
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where the purchaser can buy things according to his or her family budget.
In other words
, since the company buy things directly from the manufacture, they could sell at a minimum rate, which may be affordable for every pocket.
Similarly
, they
also
come up with a variety of offers and promotions during
festivels
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and celebrations.,
therefore
, many grab
this
offer and buy them.
For instance
, if you go to the local vendors, there hardly will get any reduction. It is often consider going for
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shopping is a pleasurable activity when the customer visits malls that may not be true for local markets. In conclusion, there is a notion that buying products and services from a shopping centre has many merits. I totally agree with
this
statement since it provides
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and inexpensive services. It is highly recommended that the small scale industry should transform if they want to survive in
this
competitive world.
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