In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their level of health and fitness are decreasing .what do you think are the causes of this problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

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, The rate of overweighting of
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individuals are arising while their extent of
health
and fitness
are
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declining. There are several
reason
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that causes
this
dilemma.
This
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about
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what are the reason that causes
obesity
as well as what procedure can be taken to resolve
this
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issues. There are several factors that
causes
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obesity
and overweight. One of them is to an imbalance between calories taken and calories expended. Nowadays people are inclined to consume Fastfood which contain
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fat and
suger
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sugar
. Restaurants
are advertise
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their product in a way that individuals find it difficult to resist their appetite to consume junk
food
. Apart from
this
, Lack of physical activities
make
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people increasing their weight. In
this
modernization, Most of the people use their private transportation rather than walking or cycling.
Besides
, people have to work for a longer period of
time
. They hardly get
time
to do exercise. They spend their whole
time
sitting in front of a computer at
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orkplace. According to
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orld
health
organization,
obesity
and overweighting problem once considered in
high income
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high-income
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countries but now it's rising in both low and
middle income
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middle-income
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country because of their unhealthy
food
habit and sedentary
lifestyle
. For
this
reason
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people are having major
health
issues like diabetic, heart disease, hypertension and so on at a very early age. In my opinion, The
first
step should be taken to resolve
this
issue to have a healthy
lifestyle
and consuming healthy and organic
food
such
as wheat, vegetables. One can be an
able- bodied
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by maintaining
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b
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alance diet. The parents should be paying more attention to their children to get them having
a healthy
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healthy food
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food
.
Office
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can be furnished with a gym room with
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equipment so that,
e
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mployee can do a little bit exercise at their break
time
. School should organize an assembly where children will do some physical exercise before
staring
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classes.
Lastly
, people should change their mode of transportation and make a habit of taking a walk. In conclusion, Having unhygienic
food
is deleterious to our
health
. It is true that many people are having
obesity
and overweight because of an unhealthy balance diet and imbalance
lifestyle
. But the problem is preventable
ony
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only
by consuming healthy
food
and living a healthy pattern of
lifestyle
. We should not forget that
health
is the root of all happiness.
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