Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Some people suppose that as big as possible the amount of scientific research, business, and academic data should be provided, whereas others advocate that it is worthless sharing some important and

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information

without cost. While I think it is useful to share

information

, I still believe that there are some kinds of

information

that should not be provided. I understand why some people hold the belief that

information

needed to be shared widely. The

first

point is that

this

can be beneficial for individuals' work and study.

For instance

, with an enormous amount of database about customers segmentation, marketers could easily plan their marketing projects. The

second

point is that

this

helps develop

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nowledgeble workforce all around the world. By way of illustration, teachers in different nations can approach international method of teaching their student, which help build up a professional education.

However

, I would argue that not all

information

from every field could be shared because of several reasons. Chief among these is that some

information

is much important

that is

not allowed to be provided in public.

For example

, sharing national documents are illegal because

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information

are vitally important to

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national security.

In addition

, some

information

can not be provided because of it's value and importance. Some scientific researches take scientists much money and time to find out the results, they could not share their achievement freely. In conclusion, while I agree some kind of

information

can be helpful to be shared to the public, I am still of the opinion that not all the

information

can be revealed for some reasons.

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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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