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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Some people suppose that as big as possible the amount of scientific research, business, and academic data should be provided, whereas others advocate that it is worthless sharing some important and
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information
 without cost. While I think it is useful to share
information
, I still believe that there are some kinds of
information
 that should not be provided. I understand why some people hold the belief that
information
 needed to be shared widely. The
first
 point is that
this
 can be beneficial for individuals' work and study.
For instance
, with an enormous amount of database about customers segmentation, marketers could easily plan their marketing projects. The
second
 point is that
this
 helps develop
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knowledgeable
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nowledgeble workforce all around the world. By way of illustration, teachers in different nations can approach international method of teaching their student, which help build up a professional education.
However
, I would argue that not all
information
 from every field could be shared because of several reasons. Chief among these is that some
information
 is much important
that is
 not allowed to be provided in public.
For example
, sharing national documents are illegal because
these
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information
 are vitally important to
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national security.
In addition
, some
information
 can not be provided because of it's value and importance. Some scientific researches take scientists much money and time to find out the results, they could not share their achievement freely. In conclusion, while I agree some kind of
information
 can be helpful to be shared to the public, I am still of the opinion that not all the
information
 can be revealed for some reasons.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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