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Should students be allowed to choose which classes they take, or should they be required to take the same classes as everyone else? What are the advantages and disadvantages of each approach to education?

#students #classes #approach #education
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whether students can have
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 in their
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 courses or every
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 follow the school's syllabus. The former method can have benefits in some cases,
however
, I still think the later one is more valid for students.
First
, there are some minor positive impacts which children can reap from selecting classes which contain their interested areas, one of which is motivation.
This
 is because when they take part in those courses, they will easily pay more attention
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 their lessons and increase their productivity significantly. A case in point is that pupils love to calculate difficult
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probability
 in Math, they can decrease the amount of time to complete their assignments if they regularly participate
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Math classes.
However
, it
also
 can lead to some drawbacks for children if they only focus on their
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 topics. In fact, some students in Asian countries spend more time learning science fields
such
 as Physics, Chemistry rather
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 History, Geography.
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 them master
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 academic fields, it can limit their general knowledge.
Therefore
, learning compulsory course is more logical since schools will create a timetable by setting up suitable classes and balance its time.
This
 schedule is useful for the intellectual development of children as it can not only study
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science areas but
aslso
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also
 participate in elective subjects and other outdoor activities.
Instead
 of focusing on a subject during many hours and feeling exhausted, the timetable can help them relax as well as provide more energy to the
next
 class due to a small break after
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5-minute class.
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 can be seen in Singapore where has the best educational system, pupils
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usually
 study from 9am to 2pm, after that they will attend in
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 courses.
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ountry which
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 the highest percentage of graduation. In conclusion, despite some benefits of optional classes, the required course is still more effective.
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