The number of people suffering from health problems caused by a modern lifestyle which cannot be treated with modern medicines. Some people believe that alternative medicine can help. Do you agree that alternative medicines are effective?

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Many diseases like cancer,heart diseases and others have become widespread in nations around the world.

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, there has been a tremendous development in a medical healthcare system,

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, many ailments are having no reliable

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drugs for its cure.I believe that there is no other way of combating these

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diseases

rather than taking precautions.

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, being

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modern medicine could lead to

a drastic long-term side effects

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increasing the trouble for the one. To

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explain, while going through the treatment of one health issue with those modern medicines, it can be a cause of other organ malfunction.

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, one of my

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lost all the hair on his head.

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, consuming any kind of

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foreign antidote weakens the immune system of a living being,

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making him hotspot for many other health problems.Especially, when the latest medicines are considered, they have proven to be

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dangerous for the human body

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system.One clear example is

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new anti-depression tablets which absolutely, kills the Red Blood cells,

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exposing the person to various infections. To conclude, we must ponder upon avoiding the usage of these new era medicines and let ourselves be fit enough to be far away from deteriorating illnesses.

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, we should try being in good health by doing workouts, as it is well said that "prevention is better than care".

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

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4 paragraphs

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