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If people could choose between a life without working or a life spending too much time working, people would choose a life without work. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #life #time #work
LIFE
 IS TO LIVE A BETTER
LIFE
.DESIRES OF MANKIND DIFFERS
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PERSONS TO PERSONS.
THUS
 IF HUMAN BEING GIVEN A CHANCE OF A
LIFE
 WITH OR WITHOUT BEING WORK ,ALL WOULD OPT FOR
LIFE
 WITHOUT DOING ANYTHING.IN MY POINT OF VIEW ,I TOTALLY DISAGREE WITH THE STATEMENT
HENCE
THIS
 ESSAY WOULD EVALUATE THE EXTENT OF MY AGREEMENT IN
THIS
 DISAGREEMENT.
FIRSTLY
,IN TODAYS MODERN WORLD ALL HAVE BEEN VERY HEALTH CONSCIOUS.
THEREFORE
 ,A WISE PERSON WOULD ALWAYS LOVE TO KEEP THE PERSON ITSELF VERY BUSY.
MOREOVER
 ,NOWADAYS MANY HEALTH CARE CENTRES AND FULLY EQUIPED FITNESS CENTERS HAS EMERGED BASED ON HIGH DEMANDS.TO CITE AN EXAMPLE ,IN OUR CITY THERE ARE MANY FITNESS CENTRES WHEREAS WORKING CROWD AFTER THE OFFICE TIME, HAS A STRONG DESIRE TO WORKOUT FOR THEIR FITNESS.
THEREFORE
 WE CAN NOTICE MORE PEOPLE AT GYM IN THE EVENING SESSION.
SECONDLY
, EACH AMBITIOUS INDIVIDUAL HAS A AFFIRMITY TO LIVE A LUCRATIVE
LIFE
.
THEREFORE
 TO LIVE A LUXURY
LIFE
 A HARD WORKER SHOULD WORK HARD,
BESIDES
 THEY HAVE TO BALANCE
LIFE
 ECONOMICALLY AND HAVE A PROPER TIME MANAGEMENT TO WIN THE BATTLE IN
LIFE
.THE MORE THEY WORK WISELY THE MORE THE MORE THEY EARN
WITH IN
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 A SHORT PERIOD.
THEREFORE
 NO
ONE
 AT PRESENT WILLING TO SIT IN
ONE
 PLACE AND BE IN THE SAME STANDARDS LIFELONG. TO CONCLUDE ,I ASSERTLY WOULD
POINTOUT
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POINT OUT
 IN TODAYS FASTEST MOVING WORLD ,NO
ONE
ONE
 WOULD HAVE SELECT, A
LIFE
 WITHOUT A JOB. A PERSON'S STANDARD OF LIVING AND THE ASSETS HE EARNED ALL ARE BASED ON HIS CAREER .
THEREFORE
 WITHOUT CONSIDERING TIME CONSUMABLES WE ALL HAVE TO WORK IN OUR ENTIRE
LIFE
 TO LEAD A BEAUTIFUL FUTURE TO OUR DEPENDANTS.
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