In many countries traditional customs are being lost. Why do you think this is? What can parents and schools do to keep traditional customs alive?

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cultural norms have vanished. The primary cause of
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phenomenon is that parents will not encourage their children to participate in traditional activities and the most viable solution is to educate them with their own traditional customs. Nowadays most of the parents encourage their child to spend maximum time on their academics than cultural occasions. By
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, children continue to avoid learning about the history of their culture. Eventually, they feel bored to think or learn about their cultural rites.
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in the avoidance of following their country tradition.
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country but, the recent survey shows that 80
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Indians
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overseas culture. A long term solution to
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predicament is to educate every individual by adding cultural information to their curriculum because children gain maximum knowledge from their teachers. So, the addition of historic norms to their academics makes them
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learn and follow them
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, parents
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give more preference to share ritual rites.
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creates awareness to parents that
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gaining cultural knowledge is necessary to their loved one's.
For instance
, in middle east countries like Gulf, Dubai where people follow their traditional customs
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ery young age because it is a vital subject in their school curriculum. In conclusion, parents don't give much time to children to learn the facts about their traditions and to outcome
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situation teachers and parents should give priority to customs by adding cultural information into school time table which makes parents as well as schools to concentrate on
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major concern.
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