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Some people think they have right to use as much freshwater as they want. Others believe governments should tightly control the use of fresh water as it is limited resource. Discuss both views and give your option.

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Water
 has been used as a ree resource since decades, which has
therefore
 lead people to
use
 it unconditionally and in abundance. Despite earth consisting of 70 per cent
water
 in total to the land, only 10 per cent of
water
 is available as
fresh
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freshwater
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water
 drink
water
, which the people are unaware about, making them
use
 it like they have the liberty to do so.
This
 has not only lead to miss
use
 of
water
 but unnecessary wastage of the resource.
However
, the
government
 has to take drastic steps to preserve the
water
 by charging the usage of
water
 as well
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allot a particular part of the
day
 for running
water
. Seldom have the cities been charged for the utilizing freshwater
water
,
this
 would not only get them to acquaint with the
use
 of the level of theatre being used for various purposes like
for instance
, in cooking, for bathing, washing utensils and clothes for which the
water
 from the taps are mostly used. Paying some money for the same would help them to careful
use
 the
water
.
Furthermore
, scheduling some hours of the
day
 for
use
 of
water
 would limit them
further
use
 of it. A good illustration of
this
 is, that if the
government
 allows 2hours of
water
 services to homes per
day
 they would collect the
water
 as per a
day
's requirements and not overuse
use
 it or for that matter waste it. In my opinion, the
government
 should take strict measures to control the utility of
water
 by making people aware of the right technique to
use
 it.
For example
, through television, social networking and podcasts. To conclude, the
government
 should impose some payment for the
water
 along with it fix some timings to
use
 it to avoid wasting drink by the people who believe that
water
 is their privilege.
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