A woman's place in the home. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Many
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that women's place is there home. I
uterrly
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utterly
disagree with
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statement and
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following essay will opine my opinion using relative
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illustrations
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To begin
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the deliberation,historically women's role in society was a home-maker. They were not allowed to leave their house without their husband's permission.
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, In the United States
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till 1960s women were not even allowed to vote, it was that year the women revolution took place and women fought their rights and won.
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, It took years of
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sacrifice
and struggle of women around the
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to gain
r
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ight to equality in the patriarchal
world
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. Women
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proven their worth in every field of the
world
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. Since gaining rights women has actively
partcipated
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participated
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ield of sciences, education,etc.
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, a
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award winner madam curie carved a path for many women to follow and actively participate in inventing new technologies.
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, women
contribting
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contributing
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society a better place.
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,
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educated women raise
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educated children. Women
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up generations, so it is important
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women to be educated and independent.
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, if a woman who has not explored the
world
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and stepped out their house will not able to teach their offsprings
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values that can only be
gainned
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gained
by
expriences
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experiences
experience
. To sum up, Women are very strong beings, and they should be given equal
opporunity
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opportunity
to proves themselves and rise higher in every walk of life.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender equality
  • domestic sphere
  • professional sphere
  • equal opportunities
  • economic growth
  • workforce participation
  • diverse perspectives
  • problem-solving
  • innovation
  • individual choice
  • personal preferences
  • societal expectations
  • traditional gender roles
  • outdated notions
  • shared responsibilities
  • family dynamics
  • healthier relationships
  • balanced lives
  • educational investments
  • talents
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