Nowadays, overeating has become a serious problem for the wealthy nations, a problem which is even greater than hunger to others. Why is this happening? What can be the solution?

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Overeating means to eat more than your body actually needs to perform basic metabolic functions. In

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we will discuss the reasons for overeating and it's ramifications. we will

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menace. Every individual has to take a specific number of calories each day to survive and be healthy. When a person tries to violate

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delicate law of nature and tends to eat more

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it leads to other abnormalities in the frame. Say

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your frame needs a total of 2000 calories daily and you took 3000 calories

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, that means you have consumed 1000 calories extra which get stored in the frame in the form of adipose tissue.

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, If the primary source of your food is the takeaways

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it could lead to cardiovascular diseases like hypertension, heart attack, high cholesterol. Following a sedentary lifestyle adds to

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problem. If somebody is overeating and doesn't have an active lifestyle

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it will result in obesity and it's associated diseases as discussed earlier. Problems of overeating are mostly visible in Modernised nations like the S. High income and opening up of numerous menu outlets and takeaways have

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aggravated the problem. Labour class people who have a very low income and work hard have less flexibility to spend their money on

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they are fit and healthy. But, there are some steps that we can follow to get rid of the problem of overeating.

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, everybody should exercise on a daily basis to burn out those extra calories.

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, we should try to avoid processed or junk cuisine as much as possible. We should not watch TV while eating as it tends to increase the quantity of cuisine a person eats. It might seem difficult in the beginning but as the time will pass, it will seem easier to you.

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, it can be concluded that overeating and hunger are two sides of the same coin as both cause problems in their extreme forms, a balance is needed between the two to maintain good health

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Nowadays, overeating has become a serious problem for the wealthy nations, a problem which is even greater than hunger to others. Why is this happening? What can be the solution?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

In some city’s, there are few controls over the design and construction of new homes and office building so people can build whatever they like. Do you think advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as sahara desert and atlantic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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