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Some people believe that scientists have more influence over the world whereas others argue that politician have more influence over the world. Discuss both the views and give your opinion?

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In the contemporary era, there is a heated argument on the issue that whether researchers have dominated the world with myriads of experiments and inventions or leaders fascinated the people through their ability of the policymaker and law implementation. The following paragraphs would elucidate both the perspective before making a final note
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, there are various new ideas come across the people, Which act as an improvement in the standard of life of an individual. With the advancement in technology, not only life becomes easy and comfortable but
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 dependent on the scientists' researches and discoveries.
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, A handful of people agree that these new trends of technology of researchers have influenced the earth dramatically.
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, The new machinery in the health sector has made a possibility to cure for life-threatening diseases.
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, some of the individuals believe that the leaders have more emphasized on the lifestyles of people by making the law and regulation, which they have to follow and make their life according to that.
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- A money changing the policy of Indian government has affected substantially on each and every sector of the country, While the new invention of the aircraft would only impact the growth of the country's defence sector. Having concluded both the prospects, according to my point of view, both science and leadership have a strong command on the world in terms of their demand of technology advancement and stability of laws and systems in the world.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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